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Tuesday, April 21, 2015

Forget Me Not

Hi everyone, I'd like some feedback on this poem. I don't usually write love poems, so I'd like to know what you think of this one. Please let me know if it's corny or cliché! - Laura 

I long to leave my footprints
On the sands of your mind;
To doodle with a piece of driftwood
In hopes of engraving myself into your memory.
Though I know the waves of your imagination
Shall soon perhaps wash every trace of me away,
I will remain stubborn and persevere. 
I wish to whisper my name 
In the background of your internal monologue
So that you do not forget what my voice 
Tastes like in your brain. 
I wish to be the pens and pencils you grasp
So firmly in your grip;
The keys you always remember to take with you;
The notebooks you let your 
Mind wander around in. 
But I know that I will fade,
A polaroid picture sitting out in the sun. 
A pen you’ve used much too much. 
I will fade,
And your memories of me will drift away
Like grains of sand in the wind. 
Hold me for as long as you can.
Take a fistful of sand,
And you’ll see that because I am broken into tiny little pieces,
I am never to remain.